Allow me to return momentarily to the “completed” poem, “Sunbird!”. In its opening line, I am still vacillating between two variations, the only difference being an adjective: “A marvellous/dazzling little malachite…” Both have advantages and disadvantages: the former is alliterative but not evocative; the latter, vice versa. (Then, depending on my choice, there are its implications on the rest of the poem to consider.) I have, for the time being, postponed making a final decision, as I want to continue work on “To a Swallow”, but what a wonderful torment it all is!

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