A Poemlet Discarded

A Blustery Day Offshoot Discarded, 30 October 2020. Copyright 2020 Forgotten Fields. All rights reserved.

I have discarded the offshoot poem of “A Choir of Pine”. I am confident that in the parent poem, I have expressed the theme to my satisfaction; the different style of the offshoot seems to me insufficient justification for its existence, rendering it redundant.

I shall now proceed to the next sketch, “That Is All”: a celebration of the sights and sounds of my rural surroundings, much like “Over the Mountain” before it.

Its form and working title were inspired by “Dis Al”1, a sombre poem by Jan F. E. Celliers who in brief, swaying metre expresses the sorrow of an exiled soldier returned. It is an unexpected beginning for my cheerful theme, but who dictates to the muse?

  1. Pronounced [diss ull], Afrikaans for “that’s all”.

Poetry Publication Progress (2020-10-30)

Another Poemlet

A Blustery Day Offshoot, 17 October 2020. Copyright 2020 Forgotten Fields. All rights reserved.
The structure of “A Blustery Day” (left) and that of the offshoot poem (right).

I am currently developing “A Blustery Day”, a poem first outlined in late August 2018, and like “A Late Winter Morning”, it has unexpectedly produced an offshoot poem.

As I began developing the sketch into a first draft, four short stanzas emerged. These, in an experiment, I tried to condense into two, which worked splendidly; however, their structure so differed from that of the main poem that they could not be incorporated there, justifying a separate composition.

I shall develop this offshoot alongside the main poem as I did “A Chat” alongside “A Late Winter Morning”. If the outcome is satisfactory, I shall include it in the anthology.